Tuesday, April 26, 2011

Flow

So to make up for my recent inactivity, I actually worked harder on this one than usual, maybe you guys can relate?

OK, now this:

Black and white, the perfect architecture,
Stable society of machine made thinking,
Save your sob stories mulling over dead fields,
Blind to the greener side within your own mind
May words let you in, a brand new world,
Becoming that which you desire
Like the waves that crash on the shore,
The tsunamis and gentle low tides,
Sapping enjoyment for pain unseen
Maybe when you drop your facade,
You'll realize that in the end

It's all water, simply flowing water,
And these shores do not weep for the weak


Poem 18
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18 comments:

  1. miousApril 26, 2011 at 5:19 PM

    great, very expressive

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  2. JbrodinApril 26, 2011 at 7:09 PM

    Nice work! Looking forward to reading more.

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  3. Brandon SampleApril 26, 2011 at 8:46 PM

    not too shabby big guy, keep it up.

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  4. henry23April 26, 2011 at 9:35 PM

    very nice. i like your poetry so much.

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  5. Giles! MoxyApril 26, 2011 at 11:34 PM

    It's all water, simply flowing water,
    And these shores do not weep for the weak

    ^I really really like that line

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  6. evldmnApril 27, 2011 at 5:05 AM

    Not too bad, my non poetic taste really likes it.

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  7. Jesse CrowsApril 27, 2011 at 5:22 AM

    deep stuff. keep it comin!

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  8. dsApril 27, 2011 at 5:37 AM

    Nice one! If it's all water then it's good that I'm an Aquarius. :p

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  9. AtleyApril 27, 2011 at 5:49 AM

    Very nice dude. I must agree with you too. If you go too far, and get too involved then you burn yourself out. does not work. so just keep poking along.

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  10. Splendid TVApril 27, 2011 at 6:16 AM

    You have a real talent!

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  11. Dr ShankumsApril 27, 2011 at 7:48 AM

    Great stuff, I wish I could write poetry.

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  12. AnonymousApril 27, 2011 at 9:59 AM

    Nice poem. I like the style.

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  13. MikeApril 27, 2011 at 12:33 PM

    Deep poem man.

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  14. Jay ReidApril 27, 2011 at 6:57 PM

    Very nice, very talented :)

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  15. Jose CuerApril 27, 2011 at 9:47 PM

    I hope you don't mind me saying that this is one of the better things I've read today, and I'm not just flattering you...keep this kind of stuff up.

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  16. Cosmonaut MusicApril 27, 2011 at 9:49 PM

    very good work, i really appreciated is despite my little knowledge of poetry.

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  17. vinex08April 27, 2011 at 9:49 PM

    very nice poem men!

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  18. I Am ProvidenceApril 28, 2011 at 4:45 AM

    Very good poem dude. Keep it up :) Following. x

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