Tuesday, April 26, 2011

Flow

So to make up for my recent inactivity, I actually worked harder on this one than usual, maybe you guys can relate?

OK, now this:

Black and white, the perfect architecture,
Stable society of machine made thinking,
Save your sob stories mulling over dead fields,
Blind to the greener side within your own mind
May words let you in, a brand new world,
Becoming that which you desire
Like the waves that crash on the shore,
The tsunamis and gentle low tides,
Sapping enjoyment for pain unseen
Maybe when you drop your facade,
You'll realize that in the end

It's all water, simply flowing water,
And these shores do not weep for the weak


Poem 18

18 comments:

  1. Nice work! Looking forward to reading more.

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  2. not too shabby big guy, keep it up.

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  3. very nice. i like your poetry so much.

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  4. It's all water, simply flowing water,
    And these shores do not weep for the weak

    ^I really really like that line

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  5. Not too bad, my non poetic taste really likes it.

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  6. Nice one! If it's all water then it's good that I'm an Aquarius. :p

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  7. Very nice dude. I must agree with you too. If you go too far, and get too involved then you burn yourself out. does not work. so just keep poking along.

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  8. Great stuff, I wish I could write poetry.

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  9. I hope you don't mind me saying that this is one of the better things I've read today, and I'm not just flattering you...keep this kind of stuff up.

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  10. very good work, i really appreciated is despite my little knowledge of poetry.

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  11. Very good poem dude. Keep it up :) Following. x

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